I've changed some thing around per your suggestions. (Feel free to take a second look.) The gesture thing especially was kind of bugging me, too, so I replaced it with how his voice sounds there and took that out of the next paragraph.
"Faux Pas" really suits. think I'll make it the official title. :3
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Date: 2006-10-19 01:40 am (UTC)"Faux Pas" really suits. think I'll make it the official title. :3